英语演讲稿 求检查点出错误Today I am going to introduce a famous peple.His name is Steve Jobs .This name maybe sounds a little bit strange for most classmates .But it doesn't matter .Listen to me carefully ,and then you will know who his i

英语演讲稿 求检查点出错误Today I am going to introduce a famous peple.His name is Steve Jobs .This name maybe sounds a little bit strange for most classmates .But it doesn't matter .Listen to me carefully ,and then you will know who his i
英语演讲稿 求检查点出错误
Today I am going to introduce a famous peple.His name is Steve Jobs .This name maybe sounds a little bit strange for most classmates .But it doesn't matter .Listen to me carefully ,and then you will know who his is
He was born in San Francisco.He liked programming very much when he was young.However,after he finishing high school .He han no money for university.So he had to leave school.
But this things didn't let him down .His friends and he create a new company together.This company named apple.
By the hard working of them ,with the talent of Steve Jobs.This company step by step ,got over lots of trouble.And now it grows into a super international company.
What's more.5 years ago .A kind of mobile phone named iPhone4 was invented by Steve Jobs.With this mobile phone ,we can watch TV ,listen to music,surf the net wheneven we like.People won't feel boring on the way to somewhere.It's really amazing,isn't it?
Well,now do you who he is?
The designer of the iPhone4.
The CEO of the apple company.
The man who makes our lives more convenient.
The man who has changed the history of technology again.
Steve Jobs
Thanks for all the things he has done for us.
初三水平只能写出这样的文章了

英语演讲稿 求检查点出错误Today I am going to introduce a famous peple.His name is Steve Jobs .This name maybe sounds a little bit strange for most classmates .But it doesn't matter .Listen to me carefully ,and then you will know who his i
Today I am going to introduce a famous person, his name is Steve Jobs .This name may sound strange for most of you. Well, it doesn't matter, listen to me carefully ,and you will know who he is.
He was born in San Francisco and he liked programming so much when he was young. However,after he had finished high school ,he can't afford college anymore, so he left school.
But this things didn't let him down .He and his friend created a new company together, this company named Apple.
By the hard working of them ,with the talent of Steve Jobs,this company step by step ,got over lots of obstacles. And now Apple, has grows into a super international company.
Further more, 5 years ago , a kind of mobile phone named iPhone4 was invented by Steve Jobs.With this mobile phone ,we can watch TV ,listen to music,surf the net wherever we like.People won't feel boring on the way to somewhere.Isn't that amazing?
Well,now do you know who he is?
Steve Jobs,
The designer of the iPhone4.
The CEO of the apple company.
The man who makes our lives more convenient.
The man who has changed the history of technology again.

Thanks for everything he had contributed to the society and also to world!
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people不能跟a搭配，可以将people换成person.第一段最后一句应该是who he is .第二段第二行，finished.have no money .第三段this thing不是things.create时态为过去式。剩下的你自己看一下，有些漏掉的应该看得出来

maybe sounds改为may sound
who his is； his改为he
he finishing high school;去掉he
this things;this 改为these
create用过去式

.He han no money for university. han?
Well,now do you who he is? 似乎少了know

The designer of the iPhone4.
The CEO of the apple company.
The man ...

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.He han no money for university. han?
Well,now do you who he is? 似乎少了know

The designer of the iPhone4.
The CEO of the apple company.
The man who makes our lives more convenient.
The man who has changed the history of technology again.
Steve Jobs
觉得在这一段的前面都应该加he is

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