帮我看看我写的英语作文有哪些语法错误!my hobbyI want to tell you about my hobby.I collect shoes .I have benn doing since I was 13.my friend know i like NBA very much.so i always run out of my money to buy shoes and now i have 20 pair

帮我看看我写的英语作文有哪些语法错误!my hobbyI want to tell you about my hobby.I collect shoes .I have benn doing since I was 13.my friend know i like NBA very much.so i always run out of my money to buy shoes and now i have 20 pair
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my hobby
I want to tell you about my hobby.I collect shoes .I have benn doing since I was 13.my friend know i like NBA very much.so i always run out of my money to buy shoes and now i have 20 pairs of them .
the first one i ever got a pair of new shoes .it was cool and it called"NO.1 kobe" just a month i bought another shoes
it was good-looking and cool it calls "NO7.T-MAC" now i ever store them in boxes under my bed
my mother says i have to stop because they are very dear
she doesn't wand to buy for me any more
but i see.i have to stop because i run out of my money and my room to story them!

帮我看看我写的英语作文有哪些语法错误!my hobbyI want to tell you about my hobby.I collect shoes .I have benn doing since I was 13.my friend know i like NBA very much.so i always run out of my money to buy shoes and now i have 20 pair
I want to tell you about my hobby. I collect shoes（改成I like collecting shoes更好）.I have benn（是been） doing（加 this） since I was 13. my friend know（knows） i like NBA very much. so i always run out of my money to buy shoes and now i have 20 pairs of them .
the first one（改成time） i ever（删去ever） got a pair of new shoes .it（合并成一句,删去.it） was cool and it called"NO.1 kobe" just a month (加after)i bought another shoes
it was good-looking(改成nice,good-looking是形容人的） and cool （加,）it calls "NO7.T-MAC" .now i ever（改成have） store（改成stored） them in boxes under my bed
my mother says i have to stop because they are very dear
she doesn't wand（是want） to buy for me any more
but i see. i have to stop because i run out of my money and my room to story（是store） them!

my hobby
I want to tell you my hobby. I collect shoes .I have benn doing so since 13. my friend know i like NBA so much that i always run out of my money to buy shoes ,and now i already have 20...

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my hobby
I want to tell you my hobby. I collect shoes .I have benn doing so since 13. my friend know i like NBA so much that i always run out of my money to buy shoes ,and now i already have 20 pairs of them .
the first one i've ever got was a pair of new shoes .it was cool and was called"NO.1 kobe" .just a month later i bought another pair.
it was good-looking and cool which was called "NO7.T-MAC" .now i always store them in boxes under my bed .
my mother says i have to stop doing so.because they are so expensive that she doesn't want to buy me any more .
and i see. i have to stop because i run out of my money .besides,i have no room to story them!!

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第2行的最后一个单词是been
第6行，shoes是复数，要用ones，而且你的 “I ever got是定语从句，因此缺少了主句的谓语动词，加个are，最后连着第7行，要加个was，是was called，是我们叫作，不是它自己叫它自己的名称
第7行，是another pair of shoes，在这里，你的意思很牵强，不清楚的老师，还以为你出错了，第8行还是老毛病
第...

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第2行的最后一个单词是been
第6行，shoes是复数，要用ones，而且你的 “I ever got是定语从句，因此缺少了主句的谓语动词，加个are，最后连着第7行，要加个was，是was called，是我们叫作，不是它自己叫它自己的名称
第7行，是another pair of shoes，在这里，你的意思很牵强，不清楚的老师，还以为你出错了，第8行还是老毛病
第9行的stop后面加个that.第10行，buy是及物动词，要加shoes，最后一行你打错字了，是store

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